Using our original idea, we will still film within the cafe, however more will go on inside the cafe. However we will still use the idea of the wall of photos, this will be in a different location yet it will be anonymous. We made this decision due to the limit on time, of 2 minutes.
The changes in our thriller have been triggered after analysing the task, what is expected of us and after gaining a wider knowledge the thriller genre by watching films and researching.
- Much like our last idea the film will begin with the young girl working in the cafe, however the difference is that the man will be inside the cafe sat down having a drink, instead of being outside taking pictures of her.
- The man will be sat at a table reading a newspaper with 'murder/rape' headlines on it. The girl will go to collect his coffee and the camera will catch the headline of the newspaper, foreshadowing the rest of the plot and she will take the coffee from him, implying she will soon be closing the cafe. The date on the newspaper will imply that the scene is a flashback.
- The working girl will then return to the kitchen with the coffee cup. During this the man will approach the front door of the cafe, open and close the door to imply that he has left, leaving the girl to continue to lock up. An extreme close up of the bolt sliding across the door will be next. He will then walk to crouch behind the counter, so that the girl does not see him.
- Once returning from the kitchen, the girl will switch off all of the lights and slowly walk toward the door, searching for her key in her bag/pocket.
- We will show a shot of the man stood closely behind her, slowly closing in on her in a threatening way.
- We will then use a transition shot to conclude to the next scene,using the back of the girls head, fading into the back of the mans head. He will then place the girls picture on his wall of many other pictures of young girls.
The man will/is a sadistic killer, and the rest of the film will continue to proceed in modern day filming. The aim and plot of the rest of the film will be an investigation into her murder and disappearance, an influence came from 'The Girl With The Dragon Tattoo' which inspired the wall of photo's.I think this idea is much better than our previous idea, it is simpler yet in my opinion a lot more effective.
I posted the following on Emily's blog. Great ideas but note my advice:
ReplyDeleteTry to be accurate in your shot list.
You say in the first line ...This introduces the two characters to the film....
Who are the characters, age, gender, character type please.
The shot list is promising but you may have trouble finding a newspaper about rape so a newspaper may be prop which is dependent on accessibility.
The flashback is a very good idea but complicates a 2 minute film.
I suggest you focus on the present and have the cliffhanger being a close up of the man's hand bolting the door. That is terrifying and leaves the audience hooked on who he is, who the girl is and so on! You don't need to explain everything in the first 2 minutes.
The man's purpose can be discussed when you write up the synopsis of the film as a whole, but remember you are only filming the first 2 mins.
Strong camera angles and a sense of isolation, with atmospheric lighting should be enough.
Keep up the good work Emily, a very impressive term.